More Demon's Eye Stuff by Peter Rosen (Please tell me what you think)

James stood up, holding a candle in front of him, He was scared, scared that he might have been wrong, scared that he had ruined his reputation over the lies of a shadow walker. He began to shake, the candle flame dancing back and forth with the movement of his hands. Sweat dripped down his face. Why was he so nervous? All he had to do was say a simple phrase three times, and then he would find out if he had been right.
“I summon the Shadow Queen.” It was barely audible. James stopped. Did he dare to go on? No matter what she said, James believed that the Shadow Queen had killed Benjamin. Would the same thing happen to him? “I summon the Shadow Queen.” He had said it a second time now and nothing had happened. What did he have to fear? It had been foolish to think that what she had told him was true. She would not appear; she just wanted him to seem foolish. It had been a trick all along. He would say it one final time, and that would be that. This fantasy about finding the Demon’s Eye would finally end “I summon the Shadow Queen.”
The room was suddenly colder. His candle began to flicker, and then went out. He waited for the demonic laughter to begin, but it never did. He waited for the fear to begin clawing at him, but it never did. The moment had soon passed. He relit the candle and sat down. It had been a lie all along; she would never appear. He had been a fool. He stood up to leave the room, but something stopped him.
“You called?” said a voice from the darkness

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